Danger approaches
but I am paralyzed.
Fear finally moves my feet
though I plod through quicksand.
As the chase continues,
my muscles strain
until I find solid ground,
gain speed.
The predator closes in.
I feel his hot breath,
know he will overtake me
with one lunge
until
my final surge
sends me safely skyward.
but I am paralyzed.
Fear finally moves my feet
though I plod through quicksand.
As the chase continues,
my muscles strain
until I find solid ground,
gain speed.
The predator closes in.
I feel his hot breath,
know he will overtake me
with one lunge
until
my final surge
sends me safely skyward.
18 comments:
Whew! Glad you made it safely!
Nice bit of wordsmithery, Lime. . .
Wow Trini...
This was fantastic!
I wish it were so easy to elude our demons...You Rock!
Great 55..
Thank you for this gem.
And please fly skyward to a Kick Ass Week-End...G
this was really good! the accompanying illustration too!
Good stuff. See if you can spot the lyrics in my 55 words
whew! wish i had the power to fly...nice 55.
mine is up!
Fly away, fly!
♥
To be able to fly... WOW..
Wonderful words...
Mine is here
Have a FANTASTIC FRIDAY now!
hugs
shakira
A dream? Your last job? Or ET? Whichever it might be.. it certainly conveyed suspense. Nice.
Wow, great imagery, Lime. That sounds just like one of my recurring nightmares as a kid. Have you been channeling my psyche?
(And my captcha for this is "pattical." Cue Twilight Zone music!)
your imagery here is fabo. i really enjoyed this.
Excellent writing... I don't know how you do it on a regular basis!!! You should start writing a book....
See. I TOLD you it was a bad idea to eat a sandwich before going to sleep!
Neat story. I imagine this tale lends itself to taking flight, and from some of the comments, it appears that others do to.
powerful 55,
I wish I can fly,
cheers!
... do too. It appears that others do too. Sheesh, my spelling has just gone down the toilet lately! I used to be the guy who never spelled anything wrong.
one day we will fly! :0
Great 55 and love the illustration.
Have a fantastic weekend!!
I don't like feeling you as the prey; I like you as predator...well conveyed!
I had the same dream. One of a few nightmares that I remembered even after waking up. I think it's because it had a happy end.
An interesting little poem Michelle, written about the picture? - Dave
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